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03-11-2007, 10:25 PM
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Mais Je Reve
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Do Not Climb The Stairs, Open Your Mouth
"Do Not Climb The Stairs, Open Your Mouth" Feet of children sprint up a winding stair That curls around their heads like wind-swept hair Pinnacle of light coming from a chandelier As darkness recedes stairs find echoes Darting eyes lift to the rafters and Place children on the roof with a helping hand Destination comes in the reverse frame of existence Ethereal dream-state conquering consciousness Falling back up to the closed door Tumbling into a tumult of shouts resounding in the hardwood floor Many things have come and gone All except this staircase on which we are stuck Peace be told when animosity has perished Many wait until old age for life to be cherished Viscous thoughts clog the mind for far too long So many muscles required for words to flow through the mouth -Jake
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03-11-2007, 10:36 PM
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* Viscous, if I'm not mistaken.
It works as a screamo song, as the lyrics hold meaning for the writer alone. Everyone else is left to either speculate or endow the words with their own personal significance. I suppose that could be construed as a good thing or a bad thing.
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03-11-2007, 10:47 PM
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Mais Je Reve
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Thank you for the sepllnig.
A lot of songs could work as screamo songs, all lyrics hold their true place in the mind of the writer. I need to make it a goal to connect with the reader more though, I get what you're saying. Crowe suggested this to me, I trust both of your thoughts.
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03-12-2007, 12:36 AM
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A balance between obscurity and blatancy is best, but hard to achieve.
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03-12-2007, 12:37 AM
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Children, not chlidren.
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03-12-2007, 07:05 AM
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Mais Je Reve
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Bitch-ass.
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