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Old 08-29-2011, 04:22 PM   #284 (permalink)
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Hello again, MB.

Earlier I posted lyrics for a song about coping when someone leaves you: http://www.musicbanter.com/song-writ...ml#post1044285.

Here are lyrics for a song that tells the story from the vantage point of the person doing the leaving:

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“Tango” by Erica

I love being your friend
too much to pretend
to feel more than I do
even though I love you.
I’m not giving you my best –
I keep my heart, you get the rest.

Oh it’s hard for me to say,
so much is going our way,
but it’s the wrong way for me.

You know that I’ve tried
but it’s no use to hide
I willed myself to stay,
but my love won’t obey.
I can’t rekindle what never burned
and it’s a sad way we’ve learned

it takes two to tango
and one to let go.

Oh it’s hard for me to say,
so much is going our way,
but it’s the wrong way for me.

I should have known
when I never wanted to slow dance,
I should have known
when I never felt much romance,
I should have known
as I lay in the dark
what I missed between us
is feeling a spark.

I can’t play the partner’s part any more
when we both want more.

I don’t want to leave you
and believe me I grieve, too,
but I’ve no wish to deceive you
when I see I can’t offer my all,
and you deserve all.

I thought love would suffice –
our friendship’s so nice –
yet my feelings hold back
like the passion we lack.
I’m not giving you my best.
I keep my heart, you get the rest.

It takes two to tango
and one to let go.

Oh, it’s hard for me to say,
so much is going our way,
but it’s the wrong way for me.

It’s hard for me to say -
so much is going our way -
but it’s the wrong way for me.

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I've been there before. Trying to be madly in love with someone and realizing that it's not something you can force, thus you just can't be in love with them (that's what I got from it, correct me if I'm wrong.)

I really enjoyed the stanza's...

Quote:
You know that I’ve tried
but it’s no use to hide
I willed myself to stay,
but my love won’t obey.
I can’t rekindle what never burned
and it’s a sad way we’ve learned
...and...

Quote:
Oh, it’s hard for me to say,
so much is going our way,
but it’s the wrong way for me.
They really get your point across quite beautifully.


I do have one issue with this, though, and it may remind you of something you've tried to help me with a few times. In the stanza...

Quote:
I don’t want to leave you
and believe me I grieve, too,
but I’ve no wish to deceive you
when I see I can’t offer my all,
and you deserve all
.
... you use the word "all" twice, a little bit too close to eachother. And maybe it's not that big a deal 'cause they're both used at the end of consecutive lines, and can be considered as healthy repetition to get the point across, as opposed to a lack of creativity. I'd much rather the second "all" be "more", but that's just my opinion.
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