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Old 12-13-2019, 10:13 PM   #87 (permalink)
LuneLight
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Originally Posted by OccultHawk View Post
imo it’s too straightforward

It’s like a paragraph about night terrors

it should be more cryptic and less transparent

A poem about dreams should have a dreamy quality to it
I hear you. This poem is actually about anxiety. I get what you mean about it being too straightforward though. Thanx for your input
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