Big3! Long time no type, thank you immensely for taking the time out to critique this... I agree with mostly all you said... it tries so hard, the poem does, to convey something that is never really hit on the head perfectly... I suppose it came from a place of anger, of sadness, dissapointment in the caliber of life as it is at the moment. The reason I am so depressed lately and with this, is because my grandmother, whom I'm incredibly close to, has just been diagnosed with cancer... It's hard to say that blatantly in a poem without sounding whiney. I'll give this thing another go later on tonight, because I think it could be great. Thank you for everything, and I'll post an edited version later.
