Music Banter - View Single Post - Chard's Songwriting Journal
View Single Post
Old 03-11-2009, 07:02 PM   #67 (permalink)
Freebase Dali
Partying on the inside
 
Freebase Dali's Avatar
 
Join Date: Mar 2009
Posts: 5,584
Default

Ok let's look at navigating the English language as a first priority:

"What I have not got" should be changed to "What I have not".
"depts" = "debt"
I have no idea what "arrears" means....
"Bankruptey" sounds like it would be a cool cartoon to release the stresses of an accountant while at work.

And the "lol" probably shouldn't seem like part of the story.

Somehow, it does.
Freebase Dali is offline   Reply With Quote