Also an interesting rewrite...i like the concept of it "continuing like stairs" that is great, and well suited to the free form ideas as they were originally conveyed. I still think that Veridical Fiction version scans better, especially if it were put to music, but i think that darks re write may have hit closer to the original feel and intent of the work.....I would love to hear th authors opinion of these interpretations...i'd be pleased and flatters that people had thought enough of my work to put so much thought and effort into it....great job all...
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