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Old 05-27-2009, 09:06 PM   #60 (permalink)
Nicktarist
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With 'wherever I go', your essentially looking for rather hyberbolic statements right? Like:
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As far as the ocean blue
etc. etc. I'm just gonna start from the bottom and work my way up here if you don't mind. :o
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I could walk in the valley
I could walk in the snow
I could go anywhere, anywhere
Just come with me
Wherever I go, wherever I go

The Bottom of the forest
The Top of the mountain
My issues start with the second verse here. First, forests aren't know for being low. They are known for trapping unwary visitors in their vice-like darkness. So, that line could easily be changed to--

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From the dark of the forest...
Since we've changed the first line here to a call, we have to write the response--and so to keep your response consistant, we have to use something open. Like a plain (pasture, meadowland, lowlands etc. etc.)

We'll just say

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...To the open Pastures
So we've finished that line. Now lets take your mountain idea and expand that

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From the Highest Summit...
Now our response obviously has to be a vally or a canyon. I'm going to choose a canyon here (it's more interesting in my opinion)

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...To the ringing abyss
So we've finished that second line, you could probably add one more verse using that technique and use your first verse as your chorus. That would make for one nice little song
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