A lot of this stuff seems repetative, and in my mind they would all sound the same. You got a few good ones in there, that aren't all depressed and boring (in terms of rhyming). Try experimenting more, and step out of the strict 'AABB' scheme. A band I listen to (Floater) sometimes rhymes by stanza: ABCD AECD or something like that. Also try to broaden you're vocabulary; the more colorful the language, the more colorful the song!
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