I think you created a life for this character wonderfully.
Things I could do without (in bold):
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Evening birds and screaming children on the sunny street below the window were silenced
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Screaming children almost ruined the near serene/somber setting you made for the first part of the word sketch.
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The furniture, mostly spray painted black, crouched and sagged
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You used "sagged" twice in the word sketch, and it made the second time less sharp.
Otherwise, I really like it, I think.
Well done.