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Originally Posted by Stone Birds
I currently have just a chorus but it's coming along
on the battlefield
we're just waitin for blood
cause we're just dogs
cause we're just dogs Ideas, tips, comments, love, hate? |
Hi Stone Birds! It's been a while since I've "seen" you here!
One comment: when I imagine a battlefield, I don't imagine anyone waiting. On the *way* to the battlefield, people may be waiting for or eager for blood. Once on the battlefield, I imagine people actively hungering for blood and slaughtering others to make their blood flow. "Waiting" sounds very passive.
Second comment: Humans are actually quite a bit like packs of dogs, only scarier. I would say humans are worse than dogs.