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Old 11-08-2009, 02:44 PM   #99 (permalink)
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I'm working on something now but am having trouble finishing the lyrics, so if anyone has any ideas, suggestions, etc please help me out.

What I have so far:

I packed my bags two days after my high school graduation
And said goodbye to my hometown without much hesitation
I jumped a plane to SFO in my determination
And made my way through the north bay with sense of liberation

My sister said I left due to lack of appreciation
Dad cried out "abandonment" toned with intimidation
But they can't steal the thrill I feel negating expectation
And guilt trips call for too much fuel and duel cooperation



I was considering using the "ation" rhyme throughout the entire song, but a lot of songs do that and I don't want to rip anyone off. I also am unsure what to have for the bridge/chorus, so if you have any ideas let me know.

Here's the recording of what I have so far. The lyrics stop about a minute in, so don't feel obliged to listen to the whole track, the rest is just filler until I finish the lyrics. Oh, and I'm not a singer so please keep your insults to yourself. Untitled.

EDIT: Still don't know what to do for the chorus but I finished up the lyrics -

You looked right in my face and said you don't deserve resentment
That night when you disowned me, yeah, you said you never meant it
So I promised my forgiveness and you filled up with contentment
But I had my fingers crossed inside the pockets of my jacket

You always said that anger's justified when provocation's present
I grew up knowing you were wrong, accepting the unpleasent
But now today three states away I'm calling you pathetic
And if the whole world shit on you it's only cause you let it
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