I think when reviewing this, you have to remember that most people who write aren't writing about themselves- they like to create characters. While songwriting is more often than not autobiographical, I highly doubt this is.
That said, I really dislike some of the language. Just not my style. It also seems to not have very much of a flow. But that's kinda hard to tell over the 'net.
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try using some soap, cuz compared to me your an isotope
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>_> not a good line. Not at all.
I think that the last bit is the best, but still. You'd better have one nice beat to put this too, or else it's just not going to be very good.