Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry
04-09-2009, 03:17 PM
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I've got a couple beefs with this poem/thing. ...
I've got a couple beefs with this poem/thing.
The first is that almost the whole way through it doesn't really have a pattern.
The second is that the last line kind of comes out of no where.
I...
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Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry
04-09-2009, 03:12 PM
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Replies: 559
Views: 80,514
Nice concept..
It's a little scatterbrained...
Nice concept..
It's a little scatterbrained though.
Like your starting with a concept, cutting it off with a new one, and returning to the last idea, only to cut it off again.
Nice idea, a little...
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