Crowe's Songwriting Collection

Raine · 12-03-2006, 08:32 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Crowe

Pretty flowers on her,
Dress, this young woman,
With a fake smile. She
Has forgotten the sound,
Of kindness and knows,
That a gentle touch is hard to find.
She waits, she's naive,
That stupid knight has,
Yet to arrive on golden steed.
Will he ride to find her and if so,
Will he know the way home?

i may have to change my sig now.

i loved it.
if we get married your vow better be half as good as this or our wedding night at happening for a lot of nights

Crowe · 12-03-2006, 08:40 PM

If my vow is better than this, our wedding night will last for 3 weeks.... without stop.

sleepy jack · 12-03-2006, 08:43 PM

Holy crap, random fact you always use to put R. Crowe for your songs, and for awhile I thought your first name was Russel.

Anyway, I like it but it isn't my favorite you've done.

~~[MERIT]~~ · 12-03-2006, 08:49 PM

its great but maybe try to put a little stronger vocabulary in the first 2 lines.

Crowe · 12-03-2006, 08:59 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by oojay

its great but maybe try to put a little stronger vocabulary in the first 2 lines.

Good idea. Let's see how we can touch that up...

A dismal little girl
Finds asylum in a hole.
Escaping the scary,
World on the outside.
Therein she cries
For a way home.
But what hand will
reach in and save her?
And how will they,
Know the way home?

hm?

~~[MERIT]~~ · 12-03-2006, 09:04 PM

thats money right there

Raine · 12-03-2006, 09:15 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Crowe

Good idea. Let's see how we can touch that up...

A dismal little girl
Finds asylum in a hole.
Escaping the scary,
World on the outside.
Therein she cries
For a way home.
But what hand will
reach in and save her?
And how will they,
Know the way home?

hm?

wanna get married

~~[MERIT]~~ · 12-03-2006, 09:17 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Raine

wanna get married

Raine? Speaking of getting married? I didnt realize Hell had frozen over.

Kyren Tsunami · 12-04-2006, 08:59 PM

I wonder if Raine is that serious to get marry with Crowe... -__-

despite of that, I like the creation, sound dispersing and sorrowful ^^

jibber · 12-04-2006, 11:53 PM

She waits, she's naive,
That stupid knight has,
Yet to arrive on golden steed.
Will he ride to find her and if so,
Will he know the way home?

that line sticks out for me for some reason. i guess it just seems less mature than the rest of the song, but other than that, i really like it. like you said it's not your usual style, but you've done a great job with it, i'd actually like to see some more from you in the same style.

12-03-2006, 08:40 PM	#202 (permalink)
Crowe Music Addict Join Date: Dec 2005 Posts: 699	If my vow is better than this, our wedding night will last for 3 weeks.... without stop. __________________

12-04-2006, 08:59 PM	#209 (permalink)
Kyren Tsunami Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2006 Posts: 64	I wonder if Raine is that serious to get marry with Crowe... -__- despite of that, I like the creation, sound dispersing and sorrowful ^^ __________________ all the songs I've Wrotes cames from experiences from the past, present and future.

12-04-2006, 11:53 PM	#210 (permalink)
jibber Freeskier Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: Istanbul was Constantinople now it's Istanbul not Constantinople... Posts: 1,536	She waits, she's naive, That stupid knight has, Yet to arrive on golden steed. Will he ride to find her and if so, Will he know the way home? that line sticks out for me for some reason. i guess it just seems less mature than the rest of the song, but other than that, i really like it. like you said it's not your usual style, but you've done a great job with it, i'd actually like to see some more from you in the same style. __________________ What you've done becomes the judge of what you're going to do -- especially in other people's minds. When you're traveling, you are what you are right there and then. People don't have your past to hold against you. No yesterdays on the road. William Least Heat Moon, Blue Highways Your toughest competitor lives in your head. Some days his name is fear, or pain, or gravity. Stomp his ass. HOOKED ON THE WHITE POWDER

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12-03-2006, 08:49 PM	#204 (permalink)
~~[MERIT]~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Missouri, USA Posts: 4,814	its great but maybe try to put a little stronger vocabulary in the first 2 lines.

12-03-2006, 09:04 PM	#206 (permalink)
~~[MERIT]~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Missouri, USA Posts: 4,814	thats money right there