Killertu's Songwriting Journal

Frozen Angel · 01-15-2009, 07:25 PM

my first question is: Is english your first or second language?
my second question is : Is you, who wrote this about you? Sorry I thought that might make sense to you for some reason.

mr dave · 01-16-2009, 02:52 AM

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Originally Posted by Frozen Angel

my first question is: Is english your first or second language?
my second question is : Is you, who wrote this about you? Sorry I thought that might make sense to you for some reason.

you obviously missed the part about vietnam and only moving to the states 4 years ago.

Ace · 01-17-2009, 02:16 AM

I tried singing it to myself.
In the words of Simon Cowell....it sounds like a cat falling from the Empire State Building. It is absolutely horrid.
To every good songwriter is a good vocabulary.

Get one, rewrite it.

Trendkiller · 01-19-2009, 01:39 AM

Well, I guess I'm not very intelligent according to you, because that makes no sense at all. I really hope that you're not pursuing a career as a song writer, because your home will have dirt floors and a tarp as a roof. Completely and utterly terrible. Usually I try to use constructive criticism and would normally say something like, "Well, it's alright, but you should work on _______", but I just can't say that this time around because that has to be the single most terrible thing I've ever read.

~~The Unfan~~ · 01-22-2009, 03:51 PM

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Originally Posted by Killertu

Is you,that make me the who

You're not quite that talented yet.

PerfectRandomness · 01-24-2009, 03:12 PM

well I do like the lyrics of a song or poem to make me think (when i'm in the right mood) and some of this is good but a lot of it is bad grammar and doesn't make sense at all.

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Originally Posted by Killertu

I don't think people with less intelligent know what it mean

incorrect. correct grammar would be: I don't think people with less intelligence know what it means.

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Originally Posted by Killertu

Is you,that make me the who

really bad. i have no idea what this means. maybe: It's you, that makes me the... something

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Originally Posted by Killertu

IT mostly the first sentence,but what u think

incorrect. correct: It's mostly the first sentence, but what do you think?

you should try to learn English better before you go and try to write in it.

Alpha Centauri · 01-25-2009, 12:27 PM

Well, does anyone like this?

strangegirl7658 · 01-30-2009, 12:51 PM

umm thats a tough one......i think it depends on music or band...i guess i dont know 4 sure.sometimes its good to write the most stupid lyrics ever and turn it into masterpiece (4 example : most of pistols songs never made sense but look at them i mean they r huge ) but if u look it in a way,lets say, rihanna , if u hear umbrella ull probably think its ridiculous. in conclusion i dont think that good lyrics r the key i think its the way u express urself.

~~ADELE~~ · 01-31-2009, 04:26 PM

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Originally Posted by FireInCairo

Touche, hopefully there will be a turn around.

you try writing a song in vietnamese smart guy.

FireInCairo · 01-31-2009, 09:13 PM

I didn't know he was vietnamese

01-19-2009, 01:39 AM	#64 (permalink)
Trendkiller Groupie Join Date: Sep 2008 Location: Crossville Posts: 19	Well, I guess I'm not very intelligent according to you, because that makes no sense at all. I really hope that you're not pursuing a career as a song writer, because your home will have dirt floors and a tarp as a roof. Completely and utterly terrible. Usually I try to use constructive criticism and would normally say something like, "Well, it's alright, but you should work on _______", but I just can't say that this time around because that has to be the single most terrible thing I've ever read. __________________ A Lynch Mob Of One

01-25-2009, 12:27 PM	#67 (permalink)
Alpha Centauri My head is beating, yayz! Join Date: Dec 2008 Posts: 135	Well, does anyone like this? __________________ http://www.mubos-md.com/brawlcards/cards/3tencu0g.png Level up Bowser!

01-31-2009, 09:13 PM	#70 (permalink)
FireInCairo Later on... Join Date: Aug 2008 Location: Melbourne Posts: 1,235	I didn't know he was vietnamese __________________ O G MUDBONE: Only You can prevent forest fires.

01-15-2009, 07:25 PM	#61 (permalink)
Frozen Angel Groupie Join Date: Jan 2009 Location: Canada Posts: 41	my first question is: Is english your first or second language? my second question is : Is you, who wrote this about you? Sorry I thought that might make sense to you for some reason.

01-30-2009, 12:51 PM	#68 (permalink)
strangegirl7658 Groupie Join Date: Jan 2009 Location: Croatia Posts: 1	umm thats a tough one......i think it depends on music or band...i guess i dont know 4 sure.sometimes its good to write the most stupid lyrics ever and turn it into masterpiece (4 example : most of pistols songs never made sense but look at them i mean they r huge ) but if u look it in a way,lets say, rihanna , if u hear umbrella ull probably think its ridiculous. in conclusion i dont think that good lyrics r the key i think its the way u express urself.