Hillside Cartoonist Dies For Justice

Ghost · 01-03-2011, 02:04 AM

hey guys, just decided to post some of my lyrics here in hopes of getting some feedback, but after four months it hasn't been goin so well haha. anyways, check em out and lemme know what you think! thanks guys.

untitled:

paper bag your religion
sack lunches for the children
leading sheep into their pens
nothings true in what they meant
paper bag your religion
sack lunches for the children

easy to swallow, hard to follow
easy to swallow, hard to follow
easy to swallow, hard to follow

how long you been around?
cause the people need some new advice
the old ways just isn't doing it
cause the people are startin to see the light

siege:

Fillin' my mind with empty space
Killin' my time cause there ain't none to waste
My watch is the only thing ticking
Where's my heart been?

Siege, oh baby its a siege
Pleading and crying,
All the perks and the tie-ins,
Oh a siege four years strong

Siege, oh man its a siege
Pleading and crying,
Contradictions, we're defyin'
Oh a siege four years strong

Day to day its the same old bore
No such thing as a laugh anymore
My watch is the only thing thinkin',
Babe, where's my mind been?

Siege, four years strong,
Siege, long time gone,
Siege, four years strong,
Four years strong
Four years strong
Four years...

untitled 2:

i just want to photograph
i just want to bleed without consequence
who says i'm not allowed to feel?
crippled, by society
ripples, in a quiet sea
i'm rising out of the dark
clawing through the dust and debris
i just wanna act without my conscious
too much to ask or too little to dream?

ask yourself where you've been,
the answer is closer than once thought

burnt:

oooh, getting burnt
loving the feeling today man,
cause it's an alright day
everythings just floatin
just peachy,
everythings just burnin
aww yeah, babies and wives
are cleanin the messes,
gun to my head but im just laughin
oh, everything, everyone
getting burnt
how are you sir?
take your pills,
swallow your pride?
at which point in this lovely,
hurricane vacation,
sudden revelations,
supernova sh!t sun,
are you gettin burnt?

Ghost · 01-24-2011, 09:31 PM

no replies at all? just one'd be good, haha. thanks.

Ghost · 02-12-2011, 02:02 AM

here's a new one, cause even though no one's replying i'm hoping that by the amount of views i've gotten that someone is actually readin em. so, here it is.

smile:

sitting here with my head in my hands
unearthing all those memories
non existent playbacks
just a recall of fallacies

the illusion of grandeur
softens my beaten heart
so when i go and live today
i ain't breathin for her
i ain't breathin for her

contradictions set in,
brought forth by my mind
its year-round masquerade
for the benefit of my smile, yeah

standing here with a smile on my face
generate those fallacies
i dont bother walking cause i cant find a pace
been too late for dawning

the illusion of grandeur
softens my beaten heart
so when i go and cede today
i ain't leavin for her
i ain't leavin for her
no,
i won't be leavin for her

Ghost · 03-05-2011, 12:34 AM

good time

never learned a way but,
he thought it couldn't hurt
his love of music of love
yeah!

driven by demands and he's all caught up
mazes of the mind
and nothin's ever enough

conflicted in ways of interest,
it's just a question of action,
but can he do it?
giving an old circle a new line
cause he just wants a good time

obediently defiant in his ways
the clouds in the sky only look different
when they look the same to someone else

and he's, he's
driven by demands and he's all caught up
mazes of the mind
and nothin's ever enough

conflicted in ways of interest,
it's just a question of action,
but can he do it?
giving an old circle a new line
cause he just wants a good time

is it something he'll find?

Ghost · 03-06-2011, 12:36 AM

Thank you, means a lot!

Ska Lagos Jew Sun Ra · 03-06-2011, 06:39 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Ghost

Thank you, means a lot!

No offense, but the reason you're probably not getting much feedback is because you're not really posting much else on the boards. As much as I'm assuming feedback is encouraged. This is music banter not feedback banter.

With that said, you have some interesting lyrical ideas. However, there's more reasons to be on this forum than just validation.

Ghost · 03-07-2011, 06:40 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Skaligojurah

No offense, but the reason you're probably not getting much feedback is because you're not really posting much else on the boards. As much as I'm assuming feedback is encouraged. This is music banter not feedback banter.

With that said, you have some interesting lyrical ideas. However, there's more reasons to be on this forum than just validation.

I get what you're saying, so none taken. Thanks again.

Ghost · 04-17-2011, 11:42 PM

test pattern

anonymity to make it easier
but bleeding hearts and the rest
try to teach what i learned
and ended up with less

but they can't
and they will
cause they tried and failed,
the voice of reason,
has been strangled
i maimed too long
too soon

oh you know i wonder,
what the masses will offer
can you create destruction
by destroying creation?
what would my mother think?

but they can't
and they will
cause they tried and failed,
the voice of reason
has been strangled
the blame's too wrong,
it's on you

~~The Virgin~~ · 06-16-2011, 07:34 AM

wow. that's some good lyrics. i loved reading them. keep up the good work!

Ghost · 06-17-2011, 09:43 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by tamir992

i dont like it, but keep working

Cool man, anything in particular you don't like? Any tips or whatever you could give me? Thanks.

01-03-2011, 02:04 AM	#1 (permalink)
Ghost Groupie Join Date: Jan 2011 Location: Where am I? Posts: 29	Hillside Cartoonist Dies For Justice hey guys, just decided to post some of my lyrics here in hopes of getting some feedback, but after four months it hasn't been goin so well haha. anyways, check em out and lemme know what you think! thanks guys. untitled: paper bag your religion sack lunches for the children leading sheep into their pens nothings true in what they meant paper bag your religion sack lunches for the children easy to swallow, hard to follow easy to swallow, hard to follow easy to swallow, hard to follow how long you been around? cause the people need some new advice the old ways just isn't doing it cause the people are startin to see the light siege: Fillin' my mind with empty space Killin' my time cause there ain't none to waste My watch is the only thing ticking Where's my heart been? Siege, oh baby its a siege Pleading and crying, All the perks and the tie-ins, Oh a siege four years strong Siege, oh man its a siege Pleading and crying, Contradictions, we're defyin' Oh a siege four years strong Day to day its the same old bore No such thing as a laugh anymore My watch is the only thing thinkin', Babe, where's my mind been? Siege, four years strong, Siege, long time gone, Siege, four years strong, Four years strong Four years strong Four years... untitled 2: i just want to photograph i just want to bleed without consequence who says i'm not allowed to feel? crippled, by society ripples, in a quiet sea i'm rising out of the dark clawing through the dust and debris i just wanna act without my conscious too much to ask or too little to dream? ask yourself where you've been, the answer is closer than once thought burnt: oooh, getting burnt loving the feeling today man, cause it's an alright day everythings just floatin just peachy, everythings just burnin aww yeah, babies and wives are cleanin the messes, gun to my head but im just laughin oh, everything, everyone getting burnt how are you sir? take your pills, swallow your pride? at which point in this lovely, hurricane vacation, sudden revelations, supernova sh!t sun, are you gettin burnt? Last edited by Ghost; 05-01-2011 at 01:46 AM.

01-24-2011, 09:31 PM	#2 (permalink)
Ghost Groupie Join Date: Jan 2011 Location: Where am I? Posts: 29	no replies at all? just one'd be good, haha. thanks.

02-12-2011, 02:02 AM	#3 (permalink)
Ghost Groupie Join Date: Jan 2011 Location: Where am I? Posts: 29	here's a new one, cause even though no one's replying i'm hoping that by the amount of views i've gotten that someone is actually readin em. so, here it is. smile: sitting here with my head in my hands unearthing all those memories non existent playbacks just a recall of fallacies the illusion of grandeur softens my beaten heart so when i go and live today i ain't breathin for her i ain't breathin for her contradictions set in, brought forth by my mind its year-round masquerade for the benefit of my smile, yeah standing here with a smile on my face generate those fallacies i dont bother walking cause i cant find a pace been too late for dawning the illusion of grandeur softens my beaten heart so when i go and cede today i ain't leavin for her i ain't leavin for her no, i won't be leavin for her

03-05-2011, 12:34 AM	#4 (permalink)
Ghost Groupie Join Date: Jan 2011 Location: Where am I? Posts: 29	good time never learned a way but, he thought it couldn't hurt his love of music of love yeah! driven by demands and he's all caught up mazes of the mind and nothin's ever enough conflicted in ways of interest, it's just a question of action, but can he do it? giving an old circle a new line cause he just wants a good time obediently defiant in his ways the clouds in the sky only look different when they look the same to someone else and he's, he's driven by demands and he's all caught up mazes of the mind and nothin's ever enough conflicted in ways of interest, it's just a question of action, but can he do it? giving an old circle a new line cause he just wants a good time is it something he'll find?

03-06-2011, 12:36 AM	#5 (permalink)
Ghost Groupie Join Date: Jan 2011 Location: Where am I? Posts: 29	Thank you, means a lot!

04-17-2011, 11:42 PM	#8 (permalink)
Ghost Groupie Join Date: Jan 2011 Location: Where am I? Posts: 29	test pattern anonymity to make it easier but bleeding hearts and the rest try to teach what i learned and ended up with less but they can't and they will cause they tried and failed, the voice of reason, has been strangled i maimed too long too soon oh you know i wonder, what the masses will offer can you create destruction by destroying creation? what would my mother think? but they can't and they will cause they tried and failed, the voice of reason has been strangled the blame's too wrong, it's on you

06-16-2011, 07:34 AM	#9 (permalink)
~~The Virgin~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Mar 2011 Location: Cebu, Philippines Posts: 677	wow. that's some good lyrics. i loved reading them. keep up the good work!