Ian E Coleman's Collection

Mr November · 11-07-2014, 02:29 AM

Chords

voice leafy hovering buzz
gray sun soaked wilting
red maimed fuzz.

cacophone chorus
chords from above.
lymph node bread butter
gutter red maimed fuzz.

torch rose heart stained
glass rose buds.
grey green blue yellow
red maimed fuzz.

hate hurt death dead
heart head love.
wood spool needle thread
red maimed fuzz.

Mr November · 11-12-2014, 01:15 AM

Puncture Wound

the actor’s eyes
were beautiful projectors
lit by the dreams of pale oysters of men
as our doves gazed longingly into the light
their hearts took a beating
glowing and teasing
until their cozy white wings
fell right off

Mr.Cramming · 12-06-2014, 02:30 PM

Hi there, Ian.

So, I took a look in your pieces of work. It is really nice to see how active you are in writing, I mean, you are inspired by something, that's a thing I can tell. Now, in a slightly negative manner, I will have to suggest you taking your songwriting a little bit further. Meaning, that you should overcome those 5-12 sentences each song. You better start making more texts in your songs, and not just a few little ideas. For me, somewhy, it seems like you're just doodling a few words together, just to create a song and post it here. Try to concentrate (if you play an instrument, try to find a few chords and a melody), have the feel, be in a neutral mode of deep inspiration, and then start writing your heart out. That's the way you might get a little more successful in your writing. Songwriting is not about your writing skills, but about how emotional and genuine you are.

Mr November · 12-31-2014, 09:56 AM

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Originally Posted by Mr.Cramming

Hi there, Ian.

So, I took a look in your pieces of work. It is really nice to see how active you are in writing, I mean, you are inspired by something, that's a thing I can tell. Now, in a slightly negative manner, I will have to suggest you taking your songwriting a little bit further. Meaning, that you should overcome those 5-12 sentences each song. You better start making more texts in your songs, and not just a few little ideas. For me, somewhy, it seems like you're just doodling a few words together, just to create a song and post it here. Try to concentrate (if you play an instrument, try to find a few chords and a melody), have the feel, be in a neutral mode of deep inspiration, and then start writing your heart out. That's the way you might get a little more successful in your writing. Songwriting is not about your writing skills, but about how emotional and genuine you are.

Hey there, thanks for reading.

Most of what I've posted here aren't actually lyrics, but just poetry. Arguably lyrics (or some lyrics) are poetry, but not all poetry is lyrics.

Although I do write and perform music, I generally prefer to do that instrumentally rather than with lyrics for whatever reason.

Cheers.

11-07-2014, 02:29 AM	#21 (permalink)
Mr November Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2011 Location: Halifax, Canada Posts: 429	Chords voice leafy hovering buzz gray sun soaked wilting red maimed fuzz. cacophone chorus chords from above. lymph node bread butter gutter red maimed fuzz. torch rose heart stained glass rose buds. grey green blue yellow red maimed fuzz. hate hurt death dead heart head love. wood spool needle thread red maimed fuzz.

11-12-2014, 01:15 AM	#22 (permalink)
Mr November Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2011 Location: Halifax, Canada Posts: 429	Puncture Wound the actor’s eyes were beautiful projectors lit by the dreams of pale oysters of men as our doves gazed longingly into the light their hearts took a beating glowing and teasing until their cozy white wings fell right off

12-06-2014, 02:30 PM	#23 (permalink)
Mr.Cramming Groupie Join Date: Dec 2014 Posts: 18	Hi there, Ian. So, I took a look in your pieces of work. It is really nice to see how active you are in writing, I mean, you are inspired by something, that's a thing I can tell. Now, in a slightly negative manner, I will have to suggest you taking your songwriting a little bit further. Meaning, that you should overcome those 5-12 sentences each song. You better start making more texts in your songs, and not just a few little ideas. For me, somewhy, it seems like you're just doodling a few words together, just to create a song and post it here. Try to concentrate (if you play an instrument, try to find a few chords and a melody), have the feel, be in a neutral mode of deep inspiration, and then start writing your heart out. That's the way you might get a little more successful in your writing. Songwriting is not about your writing skills, but about how emotional and genuine you are.