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Old 03-20-2011, 08:45 AM   #22 (permalink)
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Originally Posted by VEGANGELICA View Post
Scissorman, I like the instrumentals very much. They are clean and fairly heavy. I felt the singing was too soft and melodic for the style of the song.

I like the idea of quetioning whether it is a good thing or even possible to run away from memories that are stalking you. The song takes the perspective of the memories themselves, which is interesting.

When you write...

"Your memories will never be gone.
Don’t try to run, don’t try to hide
Cause they still can find you

I know you well
I know you will keep running
And you will keep hiding anyway"

...the first three lines sound as if they are the author talking about the memories rather than the memories themselves talking. I think "Cause they still can find you" should be "Cause I still can find you" to make these lines consistent with the others in the song.

The wording sounds a little stilted to me because you wrote "I know you will keep running" instead of "I know you'll keep running." The singer's pronunciation sounds quite good. Only when she sings words that start with "t" like "try" do I hear that she isn't a native English speaker (I assume).

Again, my main issue with the song is that I feel the style of singing doesn't match the style of the instrumentals. She could be singing a lullaby. Maybe that's what you wanted, though. I'd prefer to feel like the singer is stalking violently or insidiously rather than sweetly.

Thank you for your feedback I actually like your suggestion for "Cause I still can find you" and will probably change that in the lyrics Actually, I made the song that way so the vocals would be in contrast with the music; that's what I generally do with my songs. And no, she is not a native speaker but she speaks English almost perfectly
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