Good stuff man! I admire the fact you're continually updating with new lyrics, kind of envy you in that department too haha. A particular stanza that stands out to me would be the last, from "Water Sanctuary"
Tepid water's covering my brow
in as i see it, if you know how
a water sanctuary that is free
to die with my dignity.
The rhyming structure and word choice of these four lines are what I like about it, it just seems like it would flow pretty well if performed. Keep at it!
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