You were sitting in the street .
Caught my eyes by your looks ,
My heart by the words that you speak .
*This feeling isn't like anything I've read in books*
You are the music to my heart ,
And if you ever left *me*,
I'd be torn apart.
My dreams are now my nightmares ,
But that's okay .
Because my dream has came true ,
And if you were wondering that dream is you .
I am true to you as the sky is blue ,
And I will always know i can say the same for you.
What you have is very good. In my personal opinion, the second line didn't quite flow with the rest. So by adding another line, the additional line makes it flow.
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