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Originally Posted by dahotshotda
thanks do you have any suggestions ? to improve it ? i like to hear also the bad stuff  |
Personally I'd ditch the last verse with the Troy reference, and instead change it a bit. I don't know why but I feel keeping a bit of ambiguity is better then just flatly stating that it's about the Trojans (or was it from the pov of the Greeks?) Nonetheless the point still stands.
But it's mostly good.
