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blastingas10 · 05-20-2012, 02:58 AM

I'm just gonna post a verse I've written.

Through eyes of ocean
Our senses lost in devotion
Treachery has changed my plans
So many thoughts left unspoken.

Any opinions? Criticism? Is it too cliche?

05-20-2012, 02:58 AM	#15 (permalink)
blastingas10 Music Addict Join Date: Aug 2011 Posts: 2,126	I'm just gonna post a verse I've written. Through eyes of ocean Our senses lost in devotion Treachery has changed my plans So many thoughts left unspoken. Any opinions? Criticism? Is it too cliche?