Good work, appleghost. As a fan of your writing, I really appreciated hearing what it sounds like set to music. I like the rhythm and the tone of the song. As for the technical mumbo-jumbo having to do with instrumentation, I really can't give much input.
As for the words, some of the lyrics sound a touch awkward in places (it's mostly just a matter of timing, I think, esp. on the line "you can never learn to know them," it sounds a bit rushed to me. There are a couple of ways it can be sung that make it roll off the tongue more smoothly.) But overall, I actually quite liked it!
I'm also glad you posted this because it gave me a chance to check out some of your other work, much of which I really enjoyed! It's just so relaxing to listen to- some nice rainy day trip hop
