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Old 05-10-2013, 02:03 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Umm... interesting, but I don't get it. Why worms? Why Bowie? Thought there might be a punchline. Actually, when you said Alan was in a cage I assumed he'd be a bird, and the worms would be trying him for murder. Well written in a sort of Monty Python anything-goes way, but lacking any real cohesion. Which is not to say that I think the writing is the deranged scrawlings of a dribbling madman, cos I would never say that. No. Not that. Exactly....
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