06-19-2013, 06:54 AM
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Join Date: Jun 2013
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Advice and critique for lyrics
Hi, I'm new to the website and as the title says, I appreciate any critique you may give me for my lyrics and any advice given are welcome since I want to improve my skills in lyrics writing  anyway here goes, the song is called "Lights Out"
(Verse)
What a mess
What a mistake I've made
for always thinking you felt the same
Oh what a shame
to be honest I'd rather be alone
than take your awful tone
don't want to hurt anymore
don't want to expect anymore
(Pre-chorus)
When did we drift apart?
Weren't we there from the start?
Well I'm not so sure
But I now know that for sure that the
(Chorus)
Lights are out
In our young hearts
The feelings we have is now dead and gone
So I guess this will be goodbye
Let's move on with our lives
Because the love we had is gone
Lights out
This isn't complete yet but I want to see if I'm making good progress with the song. Thank you for taking the time to read this 
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