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Originally Posted by minkaloo
Well I'm not so sure
But I now know that for sure that the
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I'd personally change this second line to "But now I know [that] for sure that the..." and consider taking the first "that" out. I sang through most of these lyrics on an improvised melody and found that made it flow better to me, in addition to Circus Horse's suggestion.
Otherwise, I loved it!
