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Originally Posted by drh1589
I'd personally change this second line to "But now I know [that] for sure that the..." and consider taking the first "that" out. I sang through most of these lyrics on an improvised melody and found that made it flow better to me, in addition to Circus Horse's suggestion.
Otherwise, I loved it!  |
thanks for the suggestion I shall use it
makes more sense to be honest XD and yeah thank you guys for giving me suggestions, very helpful! I'm going to finish the song soon, hopefully you guys will still like it after I am done with it
