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Old 08-04-2013, 01:21 PM   #3 (permalink)
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Originally Posted by djchameleon View Post
Nice poem but the only issue I see is with your tenses in the last two lines. You used past tense then the next line should be past tense as well.
To explain as best I can DJ, this is not a past love, we are still together and she (yes, she) presently knows me better than anyone else in this world because of our shared past. Make sense??

In other words, I am speaking to her in the present about something that happened in the past.

She was a tough nut to crack because I caught her on the rebound (long story). That's what 4 of the last 5 lines of the poem refer to. Guess maybe it makes a little more sense if you know that.

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