yeah....if i'm being honest, it could definitely use some work. for one, the car accident scene has just been beated to death so much that it's become a horrible cliche, i'd steer away from that one. also, a lot of the lines remind me of cheesy forewards that kids send to eachother when they're 12 or 13 (ie: the part about drawing a circle instead of a heart). try not to be so direct with the lyrics, use some metaphors or more subtle ways of getting the point across.
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Your toughest competitor lives in your head. Some days his name is fear, or pain, or gravity. Stomp his ass.
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