Planetary_Awesome

Hey all! So I'm starting to write songs and I was hoping someone can critique this song for me. I'm open suggestions as well to help improve it!


Verse:
While you wait underneath the beech tree
I stand at home staring at the high sea
To know the others have left for the north sea

Chorus:
I know I'm not under lock and key
But I'm not yet free
Will the time come soon for me

Verse:
As the key stared me down
I couldn't help but feel like a clown
For the ones who were gone would frown
While you were waiting up in town
Standing by the beech tree

Chorus:
I know I'm not under lock and key
But I'm not yet free
So I hope the time is coming for me

Verse:
While I was driving fast
Was when I started to ask
What was right and what was wrong
I learned to be strong
As the one I lost a time so long
When all I heard was come along
So she could bring me back with a song
That I greatly longed
Underneath the beech tree

Chorus:
I know I'm not under lock and key
But I'm not yet free
Yet I know the time has come for me