I could hear a little bit of emotional anguish in this piece but there is also a rhythm and a flow that compromises the anguish. I could almost hear it being played aloud and maybe strummed on your guitar. I think you still got a lot of work to do with the lyrics, but keep the chorus and the repeating line
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I like when wind blows softly
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the same. Lots of work still needs to be done here.