hmm, i like the last two the best. With the first one, i dont think it would fit well as a song at all.
Also, Poetry doesnt have to rhyme, i think your message(s) might have been cut short and opportunities might have been lost, due to you struggling to find an appropriate rhyme. Other than that, good job.
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i would like it to be known that holdfasthope is amazing, and even though we are equally attractive...more then YOU ever will be, i worship that man with all my heart. for he is my light in this darkened world.
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