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Old 02-07-2006, 02:45 PM   #2 (permalink)
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My guess is that someone the main character knows is about to be executed? and that they (the main character) are saying they can no longer care?

I have a few comments on the wording.
and if I let you see me cry
that's not the wind that's in my eye
this line seems rather awkward, as if you forced the rhyme too much.

plus I've never liked using any swear word but fuck in my writing.
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