Bro in the story you wrote it didn't take a long time before the swearing lost all meaning, and is so blatantly forced that it just gets stupid. It almost reads like you set a precedent for it, like you were thinking "ight I'm gonna use the most curse words in any story ever", and then here we are, something so unnatural in it's language that I wanna beat it up after school for trying to be so hard and falling flat.
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Originally Posted by Oriphiel
Hmm, what's this in my pocket?
*epic guitar solo blasts into my face*
DAMN IT MONDO
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