It was extrememly well written and interesting....
The only thing I have to criticize is your opening paragraph...it goes a little astray in the fourth sentence....Whilst the opening paragraph is supposed to outline the entire essay [which it does], it's still not supposed to give so much detail.
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Starting in the 1950’s, rock music has weathered racism, censorship, and ridicule. Even so, it continues to grow by leaps and bounds.
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Though I'm sure you wouldn't get points off for something like that little sentence...but just as well, the essay is about censorship in death metal, not rock...though to two are closely related, it's not the same and in my opinion doesn't belong in the opening paragraph.
EXTREMEMLY WELL DONE, non the less
