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Old 06-10-2018, 11:51 AM   #78 (permalink)
MicShazam
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Originally Posted by LuneLight View Post
There’s nothing I can do now
No lies that I can tell myself.
This is all there is,
Nothing left to make me feel

Too long, I’ve buried myself in the dark
kept myself frozen in a lie
I didn’t know how to listen to my heart
when the facade started falling apart

I have tried to love,
Tried to let myself be loved
Thought maybe time would heal the wound
Fill the void that love left open
But how do you convince your heart to beat again
After it has been broken

Desperate for love,
or even the fleeting sensation,
I shed my clothes and become whatever you need
Slave to my need and your desire
I watch shards of myself fall away,
‘Til there’s nothing left of me to bleed

Searching for something, desperate to feel something,
My body rubbed raw,
I wear the face of a whore
Don’t know what it was I was looking for.
I only know that I want more.
You're going very straight for the meaning you try to get across, but there is a lack of mental imagery. Poetry is better when the words are used beautifully.
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