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Old 03-10-2006, 08:37 PM   #8 (permalink)
Merkaba
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Originally Posted by Jadix
It was the need for more I
Saw my mind was blind.
Who cares what way you search if
Peace is what you find?
Strongest bit.
In the last line of the whole song, I don't think it works well enough. Unless this is not what you're going for, try:

If all I do is hide then
I'm living this life in vain/I'm just living this life in vain/Things will always be the same.

I like the overall concept of the song. It's good thinking.
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