I like it. Had to add my own rhyme, nicking your ideas and some of your lines too. Its about eating a burger, people. Hehehe, double-entendre time...
I'm hungry for your touch
I can't wait another minute
Your warmth upon my lips
Upon my mouth, I want you in it
I bite into your flesh
And emit a pleasured sound
As my body gets warm
And I feel you going down...
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(In your lyrics, you could add lines along the lines of 'they say that its a phase/puppy fat, puppy love/but when when I'm not with you/I'm always bringing you up (geddit?)'.
Bad jokes in songs, works a treat.
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Originally Posted by Katyppfan
When Pete plays it is 100% live , your music if that's what you call it doesn't sound so good either? so you can't really critercize can you ?
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