so is this supposed to be a comedy song or not? If you're going for a more serious, darker feel (which would support any kind of canabalistic undercurrents you want to go with) I'd suggest reworking the bridge. The first line "when you're covered in food" is definitely comical. You could almost go with it as more of an allegory throughout the entire song, kind of allude to the whole food thing but not actually say "i want to stir fry you and slather syrup on you".
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