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Old 06-29-2020, 01:29 PM   #2 (permalink)
OccultHawk
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Make it end in a suicide with a quizzical it’s better to have loved and lost message

to your love or to your kisses
and then only unfulfilled wishes
I know youre ruining my life
I'm leaving on a train that is destined to wreck
by tying the noose that will bruise up my neck
snap and I’m done not gonna think twice
I lost and death won but you...
you were my only... sweet lovely vice
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