I'm not sure what you expect us to say about this song... really... there are no deep seeded emotions, no investment into an enriched vocabulary, lack of song writing knowledge all around. I think you might want to stick around a little bit longer and take in some of the stuff other members are writing...
I can see this as a 2 minute pop punk song. That doesn't make it good. Go look at some other people's songs real quick.
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