When using metaphors... don't get too carried away. If you start your song with no base, then nobody can realize what the metaphor stems from and it seems like pointless gibberish. One of the simplest examples that I can think of comes from a brand new song "you are the blood in my veins" that line is simple, understandable, but still requires some thought
Blood in your veins... you need blood to live or exist, therefor, I would not exist without you
Once you think of it in those terms it becomes easier to use metaphors.
hell... writing this and talking about blood and such gave me and Idea
This is another generic love song
About another broken heart
With the vain intent
That you'll attempt
To listen good and hard
This is just another kid
His eyes bleeding salty rain
Trying unsuccesfully to hide the scars she left
beneath his chest
(chrorus?)
So this is a love song...
And I'll present my pain
in a way
make clever and new
it could never happen to you (please... please take this as the sarcasm it is)
And this is another sheet of paper
molested by the pen
perverted to recieve
some remnants of me
not done... but anyway... this is a really rough few verses of a song I'm apparently writing. it's just inspiration, when you feel something stronger then usual or think of an apt metaphor for no reason, write it down, it could inspire you. so my advice is always keep some paper nearby.
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