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Old 08-10-2006, 09:21 PM   #20 (permalink)
Trauma
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Originally Posted by FailurexByxDesignerxJeans
Its no where near finished. I just want to know if its a good start. Or what i can change.

Verse 1

Im a Disoriented Teen
With a lot of Hate
I live my life without
breathing day to day
drowned by my own anxiety
I tend to cut my own throat


start of chorus

Strangled by the same line
that you slashed off once more..
It sounds like garbage
Much too cliche
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