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Old 09-09-2006, 12:10 AM   #1 (permalink)
DearJenny
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Default ok....one more try

Dizziness sets in
Is this really what I want?
I ask myself in darkness
With the cigarette burning inches of its life and years of mine

Fantastical ideas of the abstract love
An thought it is....and so it shall be
Commitment is word used only by the secure
And the unstable suffer with tragedy after tragedy.

Looking back hurts
Differing the truth from lie
Makes me cry
Inside, makes me die.

So you toyed with me, had your fun
Hope you're happy because i'm not
This is what I get for falling for you
And this song what you get for ****ing with a 17-year old






This is VERY much a freeverse because i do not have the creativity to create stanzas and rhythm and ****. I just wanted some poetry. Feel free to tear it apart, I dont find it very good.
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So here's to living life miserable.
And here's to all the lonely stories that I've told.
Maybe drinking wine will validate my sorrow.
Every man needs a muse and mine could be the bottle.
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