DontRunMeOver

Now just to ruin it slightly for everybody...

The presence of both of these two lines from the first section

...Laying in bed this morning laughing a little...
...I sit you down and begin to paint the...

Doesn't strictly make sense, in terms of the physical situation. If two people are laying in bed together, one wouldn't then typically 'sit the other person down' to tell them something, because they're already laying down. You sit somebody down in they're standing up, not if they're laying down.

At the end you say something like

"and although you are holding me now" which would suggest that you are being embraced, which would just be (in a physical sense, again) more convinient if both characters were still laying on the bed together. Or maybe you should 'sit her up' at the beginning, i.e. sat upon, cross-legged on the bed. But then you'd have to say 'I sit you up' at the beginning, which sounds more like something a nurse does for an invalid. Its your call what you do with it!

That's the only problem I found.

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