I think you should change the last line like the very end to something more, powerful? I don't know, no no no no seems sort of a week way to end it. Just a thought, its good.
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Originally Posted by METALLICA89
Ive seen you on muiltipul forums saying Metallica and slayer are the worst **** you kid go suck your **** while you listen to your ****ing emo **** I bet you do listen to emo music
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