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Originally Posted by oojay
its great but maybe try to put a little stronger vocabulary in the first 2 lines.
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Good idea. Let's see how we can touch that up...
A dismal little girl
Finds asylum in a hole.
Escaping the scary,
World on the outside.
Therein she cries
For a way home.
But what hand will
reach in and save her?
And how will they,
Know the way home?
hm?