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Originally Posted by jibber
She waits, she's naive,
That stupid knight has,
Yet to arrive on golden steed.
Will he ride to find her and if so,
Will he know the way home?
that line sticks out for me for some reason. i guess it just seems less mature than the rest of the song, but other than that, i really like it. like you said it's not your usual style, but you've done a great job with it, i'd actually like to see some more from you in the same style.
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Yeah you know what I actually had an interesting time deciding whether to keep that line. From the character of the naive girl, it fits. As for my own writing style, I'm usually much more descriptive. However, that verse is the thought of the character, and not my own thought. In her mind, she would be thinking - where is that stupid knight - and my songs are almost completely and utterly character driven... but you're right...