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Old 01-01-2007, 09:57 PM   #2 (permalink)
PaperHurricanesAndPlanes
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On the bright side, your avatar is awesome.

What if I wanted to say what’s on my mind,
Would you listen or would laugh and leave,
You know I beg to hear those words so kind,
But I don’t want to cross that line,
I don’t know how you feel,
But I wonder if it’s the same…….
^ What if I said this bored me? No imagery, creative word choice, use of any other literary techniques here. C'mon.

Let Me Know…
Just what you think about,
Let Me Know…,
How feel about me
^ It should be "how you feel" and this is just boring subpar emo. Sorry.

It's the same throughout this song. Subpar, boring, lack of creativity or use of anything remotely resembling metaphor or simile or imagery. Sorry.
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