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Originally Posted by gottaSCREM
At least now I know what lines are "cheesy" or need to be changed. Before I got "dump it" this helps way more.
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but she said she wouldnt continue with the critique becase EVERY LINE would have the words "cheesy and needs to be changed" under it.
and as for us being off topic, we've critiqued the song, it's unanimous, EVERYTHING is cheesy, EVERY LINE needs to be changed. what more do you want us to say? would you like some synonyms for the words cheesy and cliche?
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